Final?
I am surprisingly happy with this final considering it began to take this form about 30 hours before I had to print. I was seeing how the first drafts weren't working but I finally understood how to change it to make it work. There are still some minor adjustments I feel need to be made– tilting the world, tweaking the letter forms and counters, possibly utilizing different grays... Overall, I'm excited to move on to the next phase of this series.
3 comments:
The design you ended up with was a great improvement on your earlier designs. Changing the orientation to a square was really effective as it framed the earth and you main focal element. Also, the direction of the car moving toward the lower right pulled the eye towards your copy really well.
Refining the earth and car illustration would make the poster more finished. Other than that I have no other negatives.
I really loved the design and how it related to the persuasive message it put forth.
Hey just wanted to leave you some feedback on your final persuasive poster.
I think the new way you chose to design the poster solves the problem in a much better way.
Its clear and straight to the point. And definitely shines light on carpooling to make the world better. In your previous versions it was confused by the the trucks and smokes/pollution. This version is a lot cleaner and very appealing to look at.
Your final design is a big improvement over the older ones. The carpool word originally looked like it was either causing some pollution or driving over the other cars, but the latest version fixes all of those issues. It's lighthearted, and almost has a feeling of "new frontiers in transportation" with its space shuttle-like position around the planet. I think an exclamation point after your phrase would be more appropriate with the style than a period. I'm not sure what you're planning for your series, but the poster still reminds me of a record album, which you could easily expand on as a theme.
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